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Mastering the 4 Personal Insight Questions

The University of California (UC) application is a unique challenge. Unlike other universities, there is no "main essay." Instead, freshman applicants must choose 4 out of 8 Personal Insight Questions (PIQs) to showcase their identity.

All prompts are given equal weight, meaning your success depends on choosing the four that best highlight your specific background, traits, and achievements. The catch? You have a strict maximum of 350 words per response. This requires a level of precision and strategic "impact writing" that most students have never practiced.

Explore our Full PIQ Case Study below to see how we help applicants transform raw drafts into a powerhouse portfolio, all while staying under the 350-word limit.

Read more College Admission Essay Samples here.

Before

Prompt 1: Please describe how you have prepared for your intended major, including your readiness to succeed in your upper-division courses once you enroll at the university.

Playing CrossFire and performing small hacks to get ahead in the game was my joy on weekends. 2010 was the year Facebook became popular in Vietnam, but the government blocked it. I never believed in a controlling system of government, so I learned about Virtual Proxy Networks (VPNs) and how it can be used to spoof my network location, thereby bypassing location-based content filters in Vietnam. I was ecstatic to have access to Facebook. It is not coding, but it sparked my interest in computers. Not long after, my father died. Consequently, my family struggled financially. Life became serious. My focus was strictly on academics and managing the household. As an adolescent, I did everything to overcome family struggles; my personal interests were no longer relevant then.

Life was different when I moved to America at seventeen. My goals were similar to any other young adult: complete my undergrad. Incidentally, during freshman year, I was drinking Boba at 7 Leaves with my Computer Science friends. One of them, Johnny, talked about one of his girlfriends failing a Computer Science class and switching her major to Psychology. He said jokingly, “women are too incapable of completing anything challenging.” I was offended, replying: “Because of you sexist boys.” The conversation led to me joining Java class with the boys to prove them wrong. Soon after, I grew to appreciate coding and changed my major to Computer Science. Summer of 2018, I was disappointed not accumulating enough money to take a specialized CS 61A class at UC Berkeley, so I built my first independent project: a personal website, while reading HTML, CSS and Javascript. Currently, I am reading Swift and started out building a task-managing app. Academically, I have taken 3 computer science, 5 math, 2 physics courses and will complete all of my major requirements. I attended a hackathon at USC in October, and I am using Leetcode to practice coding. These projects and my persistence to code opened my mind to the endless possibilities for my future. I know what I want, and it is to major in Computer Science.

 

 

Prompt 2: What would you say is your greatest talent or skill? How have you developed and demonstrated that talent over time?  

 

“Err, that’s all folks!” humorously stuttered by Porky Pig was my first impression line. Ever since kindergarten, I have always been known as the class clown for impersonating characters on TV and mimicking animals.

Whether it was the voice of the popular animated character Smeagol in Lord of the Rings or the simple, grumbling sounds of a pig, i’ve always worked on my ability to replicate such voices and sounds. My voice impersonation skills have always helped me to make humorous impressions and break the ice with people. A social skill perhaps. During late nights, I would lay practicing the muscular coordination of my vocal chords and synchronizing my air pressure. Impersonating the voices of Daffy Duck, Minnie Mouse and Stitch were my favorites. Repetition and refinement would ensue until i could perfectly replicate a character’s voice.

During my mom’s wedding, I had the privilege to be her maid of honor.  When it comes to making speeches, I go all out. To livin up and keep the guests engaged, I decided to pull the Smeagol voice from Lord of the Rings trilogy. I said: “My mom is now Gary’s significant other… or as Smeagol would say ‘my precious’’”. The room filled with 300 people was quiet; I even heard a lady gasp. I thought the impersonation went too far and awkward. Two heartbeats later that felt excruciatingly long, the crowd bursted out laughing. It was a significant moment of my life; I made a crowd laugh. You could say that I thought of myself as an amateur comedian that day. Thanks to my younger self yearning to be hilarious, I unlocked a secret to succeeding in anything I desire. Try and try again, because the only difference between a dreamer and a goal reacher is that the latter never gave up. Coming back to the present, choosing to major in Computer Science was not easy. I thought of hundred ways to fail: not competent enough, sexism in work environment, etc. Belief in persistence and practice ultimately triumphed above all negative thoughts, and here I am today, reaching for my future.

 

 

Prompt 3: Beyond what has already been shared in your application, what do you believe makes you stand out as a strong candidate for admissions to the University of California?

As cliche as it may seem, I am an incredibly persistent person when it comes to life goals. This disposition has helped me accomplish some of my biggest life goals. When I was four, I had a passion for dance. “Position 1. Now, 2. 3. 4,” were the cues my dance professor made while I was warming-up on a ballet barre. I recently started dance academy. My parents would have never thought of sending their daughter to ballet classes, but a three-year-old waking them up every morning and saying “I want to be a ballerina” changed their minds. Due to my extreme passion in ballet, I promised myself that I would be the best dancer in the academy and perform nationwide. Ten months later, I was approved to advance from tier 2 to 3; the first female ballerina to reach tier three in less than a year at the academy. It was an exciting moment, not because of the tier, but because each tier had a different bow color that I could put on my bun every day to school. Adding a new color bow to my accessory box was how I defined my success in dance. My biggest achievement then was being the youngest dancer to be cast in a two-week nationwide dance tour in Vietnam. Unfortunately, my parents saw this opportunity as a threat to my future so they withdrew me from dance class. Although was grateful for the opportunity, I never danced again.  

I stopped dancing 10 years ago, but my mindset on achieving my goals remains constant. I have come so far and achieved so much more since my fluffy pastel pink tutu days. My goal now is to graduate with Honors in Computer Science. There is a lot to gain years to come, but a lot to lose. Therefore, I am not intimidated by the curveballs in life. In fact, I have never been so certain with my purpose, because I will look back one day and realize I have a story to tell those who will be on the path I once walked on.

 

 

Prompt 4: Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic achievement?

Sexual abuse was my history. My father was the perpetrator. It occurred nearly every week starting from when I was 5. I felt unsafe and afraid of when the next incident would occur. Being the financial breadwinner and significantly older than my mother, he was dominant and controlling. My father threatened that I would be shamed and to blame for destroying my family if I told. Despite knowing the situation was dysfunctional, I had to keep this secret quiet. Being home, I never felt safe, as the thoughts of abuse consumed me with fear and anxiety. Therefore, school, extra tutoring, dance academy became my safe haven, keeping myself away from home and the likely abuse. Consequently, my school days lasted for over 12 hours.

 

After I turned 13, my father died. Life changed drastically. My family no longer had financial support. With a busy mother working three jobs, my responsibility was handling the household: completing chores, paying bills and tutoring sister. My days would start from 5 until 11pm every day. However, I didn’t mind the circumstances. For the first time, I wasn’t in constant fear of my father’s advances. I felt safe.

 

As our situation stabilized, I made a conscious decision to educate myself on sexual abuse. At first, I was bitter and reserved towards all men. In time, my trauma and bitterness subsided. I became more knowledgeable about the abuse and promised myself to let no man have power over my family or me again. I knew education and financial independence was integral to what had happened to me, as mother was uneducated and financially dependent on my father, making it hard to be mutinous. Through this realization, school is my self-determination. So, I struck a course from then on for academic achievement and financial success. By sophomore year in high school, I was an MC for school, won first place in a debate-speech competition, volunteered, all while maintaining straight-A’s. Through everything, I am happy of how my past did not obstruct me nor affect my academic success. In fact, it has prepared me for college and adulthood.

After

Prompt 1: Please describe how you have prepared for your intended major, including your readiness to succeed in your upper-division courses once you enroll at the university.

I remember that 2010 was the year Facebook became popular in Vietnam, but it was soon blocked by the government. I learned about virtual proxy networks (VPNs) and how they can be used to change my network location, thereby bypassing location-based content filters in Vietnam. I was happy to have access to Facebook, and even more fascinated with how bits of code and programming came together to change my IP address. I wanted to learn how to design my own codes to create functions.

 

Life changed drastically when I moved to the US at seventeen. During my freshman year, I overheard my computer science friends make fun of women in their major. I took offense to this. To prove them wrong, I joined a class on Java and could not stop. I quickly grew to appreciate coding and changed my major to computer science. In the summer of 2018, I could not accumulate enough money to take a specialized CS 61A course at UC Berkeley, so I created my first independent project: a personal website using my knowledge of HTML, CSS and Javascript. Currently, I am learning Swift and started building a task-managing app. I have taken a total of three computer science courses, five math courses, and two physics courses. To gain a deeper understanding of its practical applications, I attended a hackathon at USC in October and I am currently using Leetcode to practice coding. My projects and my persistence to code opened my mind to endless possibilities for my future career. I strongly believe I am prepared for upper-division courses in my major.

 

Prompt 2: What would you say is your greatest talent or skill? How have you developed and demonstrated that talent over time?  

 

“Err, that’s all folks!”

Porky Pig’s catchphrase was my first ever impression. Ever since kindergarten, I have always the class clown because of my ability to impersonate television characters and mimic animal sounds. Whether it was the voice of Smeagol in Lord of the Rings or the simple, grumbling sounds of a pig, I have always worked on my ability to replicate voices and sounds. My impersonation skills have helped me make humorous impressions and break the ice with different kinds of people. In a way, it has become a social skill of mine. At night, I would stay up practicing the muscular coordination of my vocal chords and synchronizing my air pressure. My particular favorites were Daffy Duck, Minnie Mouse, and Stitch. I practiced and refined my impressions until I could perfectly replicate a character’s voice.

During my mother’s wedding, I had the privilege of being her maid of honor. To liven up the celebration and keep our guests engaged, I decided to put on the Smeagol voice. I said: “My mom is now Gary’s significant other… or, as Smeagol would say, my precious.” The room filled with 300 people, and all of them fell quiet I even heard a lady gasp. For a moment, I went too far. After two heartbeats that felt like two years, the crowd burst out laughing. It was a significant moment of my life. I suppose you could say that I thought of myself as an amateur comedian that day.

It may seem like a “fun” trick, but I felt like I had unlocked a secret to succeeding at anything I attempted. I tried again and again, because reaching one’s goal means never giving up. It taught me the value of persistence and hard work—and having fun in the process. I believe these values will help me greatly with my future endeavors.

 

 

Prompt 3: Beyond what has already been shared in your application, what do you believe makes you stand out as a strong candidate for admissions to the University of California?

I would say that my persistence is my strongest trait. It has helped me accomplish some of my biggest life goals. For example, when I was four, I had recently started dance academy. My parents would have never thought of sending their daughter to ballet classes, but a three-year-old waking them up in the morning and saying, “I want to be a ballerina!” changed their minds. Due to my extreme passion for ballet, I set out to be the best dancer in the academy and perform nationwide. Ten months later, I was approved to advance from tier 2 to 3; the first female ballerina to reach tier three in less than a year at the academy. It was an exciting moment, but not because of the tier. To my four-year-old self, each tier had a different bow color that I could put on my bun every day on my way to school. Adding a new color to my accessory box was how I defined my success in dance. Through my persistence, I became the youngest dancer to be cast in a two-week nationwide dance tour in Vietnam.

Now, my goal is to graduate with honors in computer science. I am not intimidated by the obstacles I will encounter. In fact, I have never been so sure of my purpose, because I know I will look back one day and realize I have a story to tell.

 

Prompt 4: Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic achievement?

 

Sexual abuse was in my history, and my father was the perpetrator. When I was a child, I felt unsafe and afraid of when the next incident would occur. My father threatened that I would be shamed and to blame for destroying my family if I told. Thoughts of the abuse would consume me with fear and anxiety. Therefore, school, extra tutoring, and the dance academy became my safe haven, because it kept me out of the house. I remember that my school days would last for over 12 hours.

 

When I turned 13, my father died, and my life changed drastically. My family no longer had financial support. While my mother worked three jobs, I was in charge of the household: completing chores, paying bills, and tutoring my sister. However, I did not mind the circumstances. For the first time, I did not live in constant fear. I felt safe.

 

As our situation stabilized, I made a conscious effort to educate myself on sexual abuse. At first, I was bitter and angry towards all men. In time, my trauma and negative feelings subsided. I became more knowledgeable about the abuse and promised myself to never let a man have power over me or my family again. Because I saw how education and financial independence were crucial growing up, I realized that school was my way out of the cycle. I began to dedicate myself to academic achievement and financial success. By my sophomore year in high school, I was an MC at my school, won first place at a debate competition, and volunteered, all while maintaining straight A’s. Despite everything, I am happy of how my past did not obstruct me or affect my academic success. In fact, I believe it has strongly shaped my drive to succeed and prepared me for college and adulthood.

Editor’s Critique

Dear Applicant,

 

I received your file today. It was my pleasure working on your first draft. Your background experience is impressive, and it is clear why you want to pursue an advanced degree in Computer Science. The UCs in particular have solid programs, and I have no doubt they will help you achieve your goals. Your essays are full of vivid descriptions and good ideas; the challenge is expressing them in a way that will both make the most logical sense and leave your reader with a positive impression of you as a candidate. With a few adjustments, your responses will convey your main ideas much more effectively.

 

Here are my general first impressions of your essay:

  • Your experiences and insights are impressive, but we need to add more structure to your responses to give them more direction. We always want to make sure that they give your reader the background information necessary to understand your examples and experiences, especially with regards to your academic and professional goals.

  • Try to make sure that your reader can connect all the pieces of information in your Statement. Your reader also wants to see how you write and present information, so it is important to build transitions and connections between pieces of information.

  • Two of your essays talk about the same event, so let’s take out this event from one of your responses.

 

That said, let me take you through my notes on each response:

 

Essay I

 

The first paragraph is both the easiest and hardest to write. It is easy because it does not have to be very specific; it simply allows the reader to get a feel for your world, and motivates him or her to continue reading the rest of your essay. It is difficult because whether or not your reader will take you seriously depends heavily on your first paragraph. Please consider the following points:

  • I often recommend starting off on a personal note, such as an anecdote or personal philosophy, which will motivate your admissions evaluator to continue reading the rest of your response. You do this, but let’s (1) focus on one story (I recommend the one about VPN and Facebook) and (2) really bring out the storytelling element in your essay. This will make it memorable for your reader and immediately establish a connection to how your interest in this aspect of computer science.

  • While the UCs are full of computer enthusiasts (and yes, some like to hack), try not to draw attention to the fact that you did something illegal. Instead, let’s focus more on how VRNs inspired your interests in computers.

  • Always stay relevant to the essay question. For example, you mention the death of your father later on, so do not mention it here.

  • Most of your response does not relate to your essay question and will give your reader a negative impression of your application. Let’s correct this by getting rid of irrelevant information. For example, your reader does not need to know that you were drinking boba at a 7 Eleven (incidentally, what a cool 7 Eleven to sell boba).

  • You write: “Life changed drastically when I moved to the US at seventeen”; how? Mention your most major change.

  • You write: “I attended a hackathon”; what did you do here? Did you succeed? I recommend including this information.

 

Essay II

  • Try to avoid repetition. I have taken out repetitive information.

  • I have made some of your expressions more concise and easier to read. Please look them over and let me know if you have any concerns or questions.

  • Let’s build better transitions between sentences and paragraphs. While each paragraph should address different aspects of your experience, it should all read as one fluid piece of writing. I have therefore combined your two paragraphs for the sake of flow and consistency.

  • Again, make sure to stay relevant to your essay question. Do not start talking about anything else (for example: persistence in computer science, etc.), because your reader can figure it out. Stick to your essay question.

 

Essay III

  • Try not to downplay your strengths. For example, do not start with “it may sound cliché, but…” Simply begin with your strengths directly.

  • Try not to include so many unimportant details. We want your responses to be as concise and informative as possible, so that means sticking to the main story and what you learned from your experience.

  • You write: “the first female ballerina to reach tier three in less than a year at the academy”; have male ballet dancers reached tier three in less than a year?

  • Do not draw too much attention to why you stopped dancing, especially if your parents made you stop. Instead, just dive directly into your goals for computer science. Otherwise, your reader might think your parents have pressured you into taking a more practical course, like computer science, or something similar.

 

Essay IV

  • This is a very heavy topic, and I have respect for people who can write about it. However, in these kinds of essays, try not to get too caught up in the details of the incident, itself, but rather, focus more on the steps you took to overcome the challenge, what you learned from it, and how it made you a stronger person.

  • Reduce the first paragraph and add a bit more to your later paragraphs.

 

All in all, solid first draft. I am confident that with my suggestions, your essay will make you an even stronger candidate for this program.

 

Good luck with the rest of your application! Please look over my corrections and notes and let me know if you have any questions or concerns. We will go over them in the next round of revisions.

 

Best regards,

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